Absolutely superior narrative, even though you blow more than half the rules in Strunk and White. Somehow you make it work. Count me your #1 fan.
- Alan, age 41
I read through the novel in one sitting, while whacked out on Theraflu and other cold medicine. Four hours later (4 a.m.-ish) I woke up to re-dose, and I was thinking, "I hope Dina kicks her brother into next week when she sees him again." I mean really. I'm still thinking about these fictional people four hours later? You're on to something great here. It's refreshing and a little-too-real to see girls who aren't all sweetness and light, who are smart and angry and talented and all-too-human, and I wish I had seen this in high school.
- Lisa S., age 25
I loved your story and couldn't wait to run home each night after work and read a chapter (and admittedly I didn't always even wait until after work). I would have loved to have had a Palm Pilot to fool around with and read the story during my most boring meetings.
- Angelique D.
I just wanted to tell you that it has been months since I first read your story and it still affects me. I can remember quotes without trying. It really had a profound impact on my mind. I think it should be required reading for all high schoolers. It gives me something to think about, especially when I am at cheerleading and surrounded by people who chalk everything up as something that eludes their algae like existence (see!). I consider you my favorite author and I hope you continue to give the world such enlightenment through your creations! Thought you should know,
"Love it, love it, love it. I laughed. I cried. I yawned (not really). Tom Robbins meets Nancy Drew."
- Bill, age 42
Keep up the good work!
- Jessica, age 15
There is an interesting symmetry between what you are doing with b*girls and what Linus Torvald has been doing with Linux. Both of you are taking advantage of "volunteer eyeballs" to check out a project and find "bugs" or get "feature suggestions". It may well be that in the future, writers will commonly post works-in-progress to the Internet to take advantage of many volunteer editors. But as far as I'm aware, you did it first.
- Steve H, age 32
I think the scariest part is how easy it was for me to relate to so many of the characters and their foibles.
- Joseph W.
Favorite Part: When I am on the train reading it, I can finish a chapter between Shinjuku and Musashisakai.
Least Favorite Part: People stare at me when I laugh out loud.
- Brent H.
This should be made into a movie....... it would be like Stealing Beauty and
Clueless rolled into one. And might I add this book was so kick ass!!!
I just want to tell you guys/chicolas that your page is the best page on the internet. It's the bomb, the shit, it kicks ass, it rocks... however you want to say it... your page is the best thing to hit the Internet since chain letter filters. Well that's pretty much it... and might I add... peaches for you (it's a phrase we only just created, but it soon will be being used through-out the US, becoming as frequently used as the word "ass".... world-wide is too complicated, I only speak English).
- Naya W., age 15
This story was amazing, it's so hard to find good "books" to read. Most of the stories that are written for young teens are full of crap, because people don't think that we can comprehend things with more substance to them. It's was so cool to find something I could read that wasn't written by R.L. Stine or Christopher Pike. And I was actually interested.
- Erin, age 13
Sneaking in a couple of chapters at work, I actually cackled out loud when Dina, during the fight in the restaurant, stood up at a 30° angle and made Andrea fall over!
- Nanci C., age 32
Hi! I'm afraid I don't represent a publishing house or any such thing; I just wanted to write to say that b*girls is brilliant, and you are a superb writer! (And I bet I don't even fit your target demographic eek, marketing words! I'm a 40 year old guy! :-)
- Tom B.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your fantastic tale. Additional "thanks" for the Palm Pilot conversion! Interesting characters sewn into a fascinating storyline.
- Kaniela P., age 20
I really really really love this book... read it in about an hour and a half, laughed like you wouldn't believe... My exbf [ex-boyfriend] used to have a job where he sat all day doing nothing and would print online things to read at work... I sent him here, and he read "BG" twice in one day and then his copy went around the office for another two weeks. This is probably illegal, but you should know that they all enjoyed it and it brightened their respective days quite a bit. :)
- Elizabeth, age 22
If Yoshi is a bona fide Japanese girl, she'll know all about letting male egos strut their stuff...there's a lot more of that in Japan than over here. I was appalled and disappointed to find that in a typical junior-high classroom in Japan, very few girls would raise their hands to answer questions...because they don't want to appear to be intelligent and thereby, in some small measure, threaten the intellectual superiority (perhaps I need scare quotes there...) of the boys in the class. Better to be dumb and cute, or so goes the thinking.
I can't wait for the sequel where Lauren's personality decays due to New Variant Creutzfldt-Jakob Disease or Techno-Kuru which she contracted from those injections of growth hormone she received pre-screening.
New Variant Creutzfldt-Jakob Disease or Techno-Kuru is basically very similar to Mad Cow Disease in humans and is showing up in some people who have been given human growth hormone extract or similar for a variety of reasons, (Lauren's parents' reason being the most ridiculous) from unscreened sources and screening only started last two or three years. Kuru - Papua New Guinea headhunters contracted from eating the brains of their victims, (true).
And I'm mean spirited enough to wish Lauren to get her comeuppance.
- Paul C., age 41
My fiancée hates you. I have spent no time with her at all over the past two days - all of my very limited spare time has been spent reading B*girls. But now that I have finished the story, I'll let her use the computer long enough to read it for herself. I am sure she will understand.
I wonder where the author gained the insight of relationships that was used continuously in this story. So many of these insights have such a firm base in reality, it gives me the inclination to catalogue all of them for personal use.
I am also curious how much like Dina the author is. Is she as quick-witted? I must
find more of her work. She may become a new "Who would you want to have dinner with and why?" candidate for any hypothetical college application essays I might have to write.
- Owen W., age 24
My favorite part was the detailed descriptions of the girls' warfare: shadowbets, secret signals, "hermetically sealed arguments". Makes me glad I'm not an adolescent girl in the B*girls universe, but doesn't stop me from laughing at it.
- Mark S., age 22
I just read your e-book called B*girls on my palmpilot and have to admit that I laughed my ass off. This was one of the most entertaining books I have ever read. I especially liked your use of teenage boy clichés and have to shout out loud "it's all true!"
After all that positive talking I also have a point of criticism (duh!): why is everybody so stupid in your story (except Dina and her best friend of course)? I know that it is funny, but isn't it a bit exaggerated that a girl does not know where up and down is?
- Sebastian M.
Words have always been my most fave art form. Black and white symbols on a page. That is all, but in that a dangerous alchemy. You have crafted a wonderful spell. A big mahalo for that!
- Lloyd A., age 33
I'm an avid reader but it's been a while since I've read a book I've enjoyed as much as yours. Without seeming to borrow anything, it evoked memories of Twain, Wodehouse and (ask me not why!) Summer of Night by Dan Simmons.
- Dan P.
There is certainly nothing wrong with the expression of anger, however it is helpful to balance it out with other emotions and the darkness in this book is pushing me away from it as I think it might many others.
- Lauri B., age 33
Your book was a waste of my time. All of that meaning-less talk to lead up to the most boring end of a book I have ever read. I just hope no one else wastes their time reading your book.
- Kim, age 15
You have a very hilarious insight into the female geeks mind. Unfortunately most normal people won't get it.
- Krissy A., age 17
"Sarky" means, basically, sarcastic - snide, bitter, and humorous. If your Dina were goth (as if! ;) she would be a Sarkygoth. Romantigoth is more... Gomez and Morticia Addams, flowy dresses, Wuthering Heights (Bronte *or* Kate Bush) - that kind of foofy thing if your Beth were goth, she would probably be a Romantigoth. They're most likely to be seen in frilly dresses on the girls and foofy lacy shirts with velvet coats on the guys... ultrafeminine and historically-inspired stuff for both sexes, tendency to read Keats and Shelley a lot. Violent and delicious souls, or pretentious wankers, depending on your viewpoint (I tend to go with the latter, but still can't keep myself out of crinolines... oh well).
I enjoyed it all. Even downloaded the story into my Palm III. Several of the kids at my library where I am a Children's and Young Adult Librarian have asked about it.
- Michael P., age 33
I identify with Dina, but don't really prefer her as a person, if that makes sense. Except in that she's sort of well-intentioned.
It seems odd that eight or ten kids in a group of thirty-four seniors should be so grotesquely rich. In general, the town's population seems to small to support it's wealthiest members. This needs explanation. Also, how believable is it that Dina's 17 and hasn't had an orgasm yet? I know she was raised Catholic, and is diffident and out of touch with her body, but I thought that sort of tragedy was part of the past. I figured that, being a tomboy and not stupid, she'd have a better chance at "the big O" than any of the idiot girls around her, who are less consciously trapped in the Object-Subject complex of female identity. (Sorry to bust out the Beauvoir, but it had to be done.)
I stayed up until five am reading it, and at one point (after finishing chapter seven) got so excited I had to have a cigarette (don't usually smoke). Okay, Ms. Author, I turned to chemicals I usually abstain from because I found your book so intriguing. You used Plato's dialogue form! How cool is that?! (<- rhetorical) I haven't been so interested in a novel since the letter passage in Persuasion. (And I like Jane Austen.) This falls into the category of culturally definitive fiction on the good side of the Douglas Coupland/F. Scott Fitzgerald split. (I don't mean to say you'll necessarily write as well as Fitzgerald, only that this novel, while ruthlessly hip, is damn substantial. The required spiritual revelation bit is not sort of ass-random like in Generation X.) Now perhaps my enthusiasm is the result of recognizing myself and my peers in this book. But I know it's not just that. Thank you for making all of the characters and once deeper and more shallow than they appear. You're a bit heavy-handed with the philosophy, but that's part of the funhouse mirror style, I suppose, like the way the characters are hipper and funnier and more articulate and especially more cruel than anyone on earth (I hope). Also (and I'm taking Alec's speech about Yin writing and Yang writing as the Author speaking) you wrote the truth as complex and indecipherable as it really is, which requires dedication and talent. Answers are easy. Truth is hard. I think you wrote a piece of it here, which is why the novel's hipness is engaging rather than maddening. Thanks and please keep writing.
- Sarah, age 19
Begging the question doesn't actually mean that the question is begging to be asked but as I understand it is a response in an argument that merely rephrases the question instead of addressing the issue. Many people use this incorrectly, but the incorrect usage seems out of place in your writing.
It was great I'm a writer myself in fact I just finished a book.
- Daisy, age 14
I am going to read it again really soon (and if it wasn't after midnight, I'd do it again now.) Where do I pay money?
- Mark, age 31
I just finished reading the story (it's 3:30 in the morning, I had to finish it!) and I thought it was incredible. Extremely smart and witty, something not often seen these days. The comics at the start of each chapter were such a great addition to the story, such a great idea. I am definitely going to tell my friends to check it out if they want something intelligent and funny to read. Maybe they'll learn something too.
- Jessica C., age 23
There is to much description and rambles on A LOT. Most of the people that read it will be 14-17, so we don't have that vast of vocabulary!
- Michelle, age 15
Couldn't freakin' stand the overly precious tone of the whole thing. Deleted it
off my Palm after two chapters. Bleah. If the idea is to show that the narrator is
unselfconsciously a twit, then do that in the dialog. Narration is supposed to be coming from a time after the events described, when the narrator has learned and evolved, and isn't such a twit now. "...Why babies scream in the night..."? Jaysus. Author is what, 19 years old? Y'know, there's a REASON why young'uns don't get frequently published.
The characters are great. All of them are unbalanced in some way or another, and Dina, as narrator, with her unbridled cynicism, and realization that she is such, actually reminds me of myself when I went through high school, scary as that sounds. The rest of the characters, Laura, Andrea, and Corey, are all either extremely stupid or, more accurately, wrapped up in their own little foibles to truly understand how foolish they are. Maybe that's part of Dina's appeal. She's cynical and catty, but she realizes this about herself, and in doing so, seems more balanced.
I doubt it was easy trying to convey the cynicism, hopefulness, exuberance, pettiness, chicanery, and unbridled optimism that most people have when they're going through high school.
- Chris G.
Except for the plethora of typos, and the mistransliteration of the French (it's Je ne sais pas, as I'm sure untold numbers of other self-appointed editorial staff have informed you), I thought B*girls was the best thing I read off my Palm III except for a couple of obscure Twain scrawlings. And now I see your name at the bottom of the Star Wars origins site.
You're a friggin' genius. I'm not worthy. I'm glad I don't know you; it would be too hard to take it you had dandruff, or calluses, or something.
- Jim B.
I couldn't read this book twice to save my life. (Surprise endings tend to run that way with me). I didn't really like the writing style. After awhile the tone became just grating. I thought there were way too many tangents.
Dina is a pretty accurate representation of a hyperactive minded bitch though. Lauren was my favorite character because she was a complete and total control freak and reminded me of a friend of mine.
I dug reading the story, otherwise I wouldn't have wasted a whole day I could have spending studying for the AP test oh my god it's in a week!!!! But anyway, I think it should be filled out in some ways and trimmed down in others. I'm just a geeky high school student. But I read a lot of books and when I write I like anyone's opinions (as long as they are specific and justified) because I can usually build off them... so I hope you don't kill me for not kissing your ass.
- Kay D., age 16